Hello! So, I'm turning a comic I wrote as a child into a novel, and here's a preview: "Ralph took a deep breath, then closed his eyes, but only for a moment. He then thrust his arms into the air and yelled, “Urgon!”. When he opened his eyes again, Rudy noticed something. Something upsetting. Something peculiar. Something like she’d never seen before in her entire time on this planet. Ralph's eyes had changed. Where his iris and pupil once were, was a horizontal line. Like a frogs’ eye, only it belonged to a human. Rudy was astonished. She could not believe what she was seeing. She let out a gasp, that was louder than she intended it to be. Ralph heard her and let out a small grunt. He put his hand up to his ear. Rudy covered her mouth with her hands. Her heart was pounding inside her chest. Beating 100 miles per hour. Buh-boom. Buh-boom. Buh-boom. Rudy’s instincts were telling her to do one thing. It was to get out of there. And fast." Any feedback?